Twilight
Twilight taught her children
how it’s natural to diverge
and to stray from Light–for darkness comes
each day, at Heaven’s urge
And although she seems foreboding,
shifting paths ahead unclear,
It is in this slow defeat of light
She says “Rebirth is near!”
She showed how the bloom would wither,
petals drop and blow away,
if not for the Night–who grants reprieve
and tends to wounds of Day;
and how withered blooms surrender
when their use outlives their form–
but she vowed to us that Day would bring
A stronger Promise born.
Then she bowed her head to Venus
and she slipped away, unseen–
knowing she had served us well
at places in-between.
May 9, 2009 at 2:16 am
Wow, that last stanza dropped my stomach into my toes! Your language is beaming 🙂
May 9, 2009 at 9:23 am
Thank you Wesley! I just took a peek at your poetry–I could say the same of you! Imagery abound! I’ll be back when I have some more time to spend absorbing your thoughts…so glad you stopped by so I could find your blog:)
May 9, 2009 at 11:41 pm
Fantastic! You’re a natural.
May 10, 2009 at 11:21 pm
Thank you Mnemsyne:)
May 10, 2009 at 3:43 pm
absolutely beautiful…
May 10, 2009 at 11:18 pm
Thank you, ebbtide. I enjoy your poetry as well. I’m glad you stopped by…
May 10, 2009 at 11:32 pm
It just keeps getting better – beautiful -I want to paint this.
May 10, 2009 at 11:52 pm
Thank you Della 😉
May 11, 2009 at 6:20 am
I know I’ve already commented on this stunningly beautiful poem on your thread Danielle but I keep coming back to it. The line ‘It is in this slow defeat of light’ is haunting me at the moment, absolutely love it.
May 11, 2009 at 2:05 pm
Thank you for being so encouraging Julie:) I’m so glad you like it:)
May 16, 2009 at 4:08 pm
Hi, Danielle! Stop by my blog to pick up your Kreativ Blogger award! Please do not feel obligated to post the award or pass it on if you do not wish to do so. This is just my way of letting you know that I think highly of your work and want to share it with others. ☺
Love,
Susan Sonnen
May 16, 2009 at 4:19 pm
oops. that sad face was supposed to be a smiley. for some reason, it reverses when i transfer from macjournal. 🙂
May 19, 2009 at 10:05 am
I loved the pace and meter of this. Once I got past that, the wording tickled my skin like a maritime zephyr. The gentle, healing nature of coming night was beautifully expressed.
I’m not a poetry critic. Does it show? It does, doesn’t it? I should pull my skirt down, my ignorance is showing.
I enjoyed this very much, though.
May 19, 2009 at 10:28 am
You are too funny! No worries about being a poetry critic as I don’t consider myself a real “poet.” So glad you stopped by, and I am enjoying the banter about your latest post. Smiling and laughing out loud–great way to start the day. Consider yourself blogrolled. Cheers! 😉
May 20, 2009 at 12:31 am
The unseen bird called softly
in the blooming glow of sunset
The winged thought glides slowly
on spread wings of softest down
Resting in the twilight
enamored with the dark.
I enjoyed Twilight too.
May 20, 2009 at 9:04 am
Lovely. Thanks for this…..
June 4, 2009 at 8:43 am
Very evocative. This is another one i shall want to re-read.
June 7, 2009 at 9:33 pm
Thanks so much Helen. I am so glad you stopped by…
October 7, 2009 at 11:43 pm
Hi, I’ve been reading, enjoying your words, images, and depth. I have only one complaint and decided to drop a comment here — “I don’t consider myself a ‘real poet'” is what you wrote above and I must argue, howl, and disagree wholeheartedly!!! You write, beautifully, and please do not make me return and set you straight again. (note a certain sharpness in tone, but delivered with honest affirmation and encouragement?) That said … thanks for dropping by my blog as well and I will be back also — I haven’t finished reading everything yet! You ARE a writer/poet. Repeat quietly in the first person as often as necessary. And keep writing.
October 8, 2009 at 7:33 am
What a wonderful comment to wake up to, Purple. Tone noted 😉 Thank you so much for the words of encouragement. I am constantly amazed at the kindness of other writers. 🙂