Lucky
jack-o-lantern
carved and gutted hollow
only has to fake a smile for
one night.
October 30, 2009
Pumpkin Envy
Posted by calliopespen under poetry | Tags: cinquain, halloween, jack-o-lantern, loneliness, poetry, pretense, pumpkin, sadness |[34] Comments
October 30, 2009 at 12:53 pm
OHMAN! You are tearing my heart out! and making me smile at your mad skills.
October 30, 2009 at 4:25 pm
October 30, 2009 at 12:57 pm
very cute and clever!
October 30, 2009 at 4:23 pm
Thank you, Scotti! Nice to meet you
October 30, 2009 at 1:03 pm
holy cow this zings!!!
poignant as hell, yet funny
jack-o-laterns, all…
Just sitting here overcome. You are gifted to be able to do that with so few words. You do that to me often! You’re like the poetry jedi…light saber packed with letters grouping wild…
Thank You and Cheers!
October 30, 2009 at 4:22 pm
Jedi??? Ohh I am lovin’ it, Bliss. You are too funny! Thank you
October 30, 2009 at 1:32 pm
It’s easier to be a jack o’lantern than it is to be Cinderella. I love this cinquain! Kind of makes me want to know what words go through the pumpkin’s mind during the carving …
October 30, 2009 at 1:41 pm
LOL, if he had a mind, I bet the words “oh shit” might be a good guess.
Raven
http://cherokeebydesign.wordpress.com/
October 30, 2009 at 4:20 pm
Bet you’re right about that!
October 30, 2009 at 4:21 pm
Hmmm. Now that’s a great prompt, Annmarie:)
October 30, 2009 at 5:21 pm
Awesome, Danielle. Oh to be the Pumpkin, whose forced smile only needs to last until the morning light! …
…wherein he is smashed and ground and discarded or turned into baby food for pumpkin pie filling.
October 30, 2009 at 6:26 pm
Oh yes–the pie! My favorite–warm, with vanilla ice cream. YUM.
October 31, 2009 at 4:11 am
Pumpkin envy indeed! Great job on this – and puts pumpkins in a whole new light.
October 31, 2009 at 10:44 am
A whole new light;) Pun intended?;) Thanks, Falc! Happy Halloween!
October 31, 2009 at 3:39 pm
The title made me cackle. ^_^ Very cute!
November 2, 2009 at 11:39 am
October 31, 2009 at 5:07 pm
“carved and gutted hollow”
This was very Boo worthy and it alternately creeped me out and made me smile.
November 2, 2009 at 11:39 am
“Boo worthy makes me very happy,” in a devilish sort of way, Val. Thank you:)
October 31, 2009 at 11:17 pm
wow!! really cool metaphor!
i love love love your header..
November 2, 2009 at 11:40 am
Thanks Shraddha! That’s the front of my home, actually from last year. I really neglected my gardening this year, so no coleus:(
November 1, 2009 at 2:08 pm
I finally remembered to look up the word ‘cinquain’! Had no idea they existed and am VERY excited to learn this. Thank You, Thank You, Thank You!!! Cheers and Namaste.
November 2, 2009 at 11:41 am
Bliss, they are loads of fun to write! This one is kind of sub-par though–I don’t like the “for” dangling off the end there. But it was fun to write anyway:)
November 2, 2009 at 8:53 pm
Sub-par???
Okay. I’ve got my rule book out and on page 325 it specifically states that You are not allowed ever to refer to Your work as ‘sub-par’!!! Don’t make me come over there!
November 3, 2009 at 10:30 am
Ha! But a visit would be FUN!!!!
November 1, 2009 at 4:55 pm
Awesome, you say so much in so few lines, and get the message through unmistakably.
November 2, 2009 at 11:42 am
So glad to see you again, Mark–and I see you’re now on WP! I’ll be stopping in….
November 1, 2009 at 6:15 pm
This rocks! Kinda makes me wish I’d carved a pumpkin this year..
November 2, 2009 at 11:42 am
We didn’t carve any this year either, Lisa. Good thing or I would have been haunted by my own poem. Yikes:)
November 2, 2009 at 7:33 am
… and from there on in remains delighted?
November 2, 2009 at 11:43 am
!!! YES!
November 3, 2009 at 1:18 am
This is true, (and hilarious), however, after one night of faking it, the jack-o-lantern usually tends to go rotten!
November 3, 2009 at 10:30 am
Yep, they sure do, Azfree. Faking takes a lot out of you!
November 3, 2009 at 1:45 am
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November 7, 2009 at 9:41 pm
simply brilliant